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1、读后续写练习写作:人与社会SUPerherO没有superpower第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Itwasacold,snowyevening.Tommywasrunningasfastashecould,focusedonnothingbuthisdestinationtheshoponthestreetcorner.Twoweeksago,hesawfigurines(小雕像)ofMarvelsuperheroesontheshelvesandfelthehadtohaveone.Hesbeenwalkingtheneigh
2、borsdogeversincethentoearnmoneytorealizehislittledream.Hewassoexcitedandhardlynoticingtheworldaroundhim.Maybethatswhyhetrippedoverthelegsofahomelesswoman,whowassittingonthesidewalk,herbackagainstthewall.Hcmurmuredsorryandmovedontohisdestination.Onceheenteredtheshop,hewentstraighttotheshelveswithfigu
3、rines.Hulk1Thor,CaptainAmerica,IronMan,andmanymore一allofhisadmiredheroes.WithhisheartpoundinglikecrazyhereachedforSpiderman.,Youlikethese,truebeliever?Tommyturnedaround.noldmanwasstandingbehindhimwithawidesmileonhisface.,Y-yes.Yes,theyreawesomeJ,answeredTommy.Theyrestrongandfastandhelpotherpeoplealo
4、t.theboylookedatfigurinesinadmiration.1lwishIcouldbeasuperherotoo.“Thenbecomeone!saidtheoldman.How?Tommyaskedinsurprise.Idonthaveanysuperpowers/Andwhywouldyouneedthem7theoldmansmiled.Seeingtheconfusionontheboysface,heSqUatted(蹲F)andputhishandsonTommysarms.,Didyouknow,thatshopkeeperladyovertherehasad
5、isabledhusband?Shesbeenworkinghardandtakingcareofhimforyears.Iveneverheardawordofcomplaintfromher.Andthispersonhepointedataredheadman,whojustenteredtheshop.Hesafirefighter;hessavedcountlesslives.Henevergivesup,nomatterhowdangerousthesituationseemstobe.TheoldmanlookedTommyintheeyesandsmiled.Youdontne
6、edasuperpowertobeaheroforsomeoneelse.Thepathofasuperherostartsnotinthemind,notinthemuscles,butintheheart.Paral:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.Para2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.写作解析0.确定人称:第三人称1.极理原文情节:Tommy;theoldman;thehomelesswoman2,确定主题?3.构思情节Pl:Tom
7、myloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.衔接1:Tommy想什么?什么心情?-困惑,在思考老人的话Tommy意识到啥+问老人+老人没说话+微笑Tommy若有所思+放回Spiderman+买了面包和水+离开storeP2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.侑接3:Tommy:走近+给+说theoldwoman的反应:惊讶T感动+结果Offer还没等thewoman反应过来,TOmmy已经跑远。TOmmy的感悟:成文SUPerher。并不需要超能力或者商面定格:T
8、Ommy在风雪中奔跑回家,感觉自己就是一个超级英雌【参考范文一】Pl:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.Hismindwashauntedbytheoldmanswords:,Thepathofasuperherostartsintheheart.Suddenly,WithanideaignitinginTommysmind,heliftedhiseyesandinquiredearnestly,YoumeanIcanbethesuperherobyhelppeopleinneed?Theoldmanofferedn
9、overbalresponse,yethisbeamingsmilespokevolumes,affirmingTommysquestionwithsilentreassurance.TommyduckedhisheadandgazedattheSpidermaninhishand,ponderingforamomentbeforegentlyplacingitbackontheshelf.Armedwithnewresolve,heusedhishard-earnedmoneytopurchasebreadandwaterbeforestridingoutofthestorewithouta
10、backwardglance.P2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.lieapproachedhercautiously,murmuring,Thisisforyou/hisvoicetingedwithablendoftensionandawkwardness.Startled,theoldwomanlookedup,andwithinmoments,hereyeswelledupwithtearsassheacceptedthefoodshakily.Beforeshecouldutteraword,Tommyhada
11、lreadydashedawayintothebustlingstreets.Allthewayalong,theimageofthewomansface,etchedwithappreciation,replayedinTommysmind.Withhisfirststeponthepathtobecomingasuperhero.Tommydiscoveredthatitwasmuchsimplerthanhehadeverimagined.参考范文二】Pl:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.Finally,he
12、raisedhishead.SoIamsupposedto.hestoppedmid-sentencewhenherealizedthathewasalone.Heturnedhisheadleftandright,buttheoldmanwasnowheretobeseen.Tommysighedheavily-healreadyhadanideaofwhatheshoulddo.Helookedatfigurinesforthelasttime/gavefigurinesonelastglanceandmovedtowardsthecounter.Twosandwichesandacupo
13、fteaplease,“hesaid.(Thenext.SeCOndfoundTommyWaIkCdfast,OrratherdashedOutOftheshop,CarefuIIyWatChingOUtforthelady.)PZ:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.Tommycamecloserandcarefullygavethewomanhisbuys.Hereyesopenedwideinsurprise,thenfilledwithtears.“Thankyou/shewhispered.Tommybowedhis
14、head,turnedaroundandwentbackhome.Hewasmovingfasterandfasterandfinallyhestartedtorun.Strangeenergyfillinghisbodymadehimfeellikehecouldfly.Whenhefinallystopped,hewasbreathingheavily,buthedidntfeeltired.Hesmiledhappily-itwasawonderfulfeeling.Andnothingcouldstopit.TheladysSimPIeWOrdSbubbledinhismind,pointingtohisnewfoundtruththatOnCtrulyCanbeaSUPerheroWithOUtSUPerPOWerS或RUnninginIheChillywinds.TornmynoIOngCrfeltcold,butburnedWiththeioyOfbeingaSUPerhero.)