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1、托福作文写作范文详解题目:Somepeoplesaythatthebestwaytoimprovepublichealthisbyincreasingthenumberofsportsfacilities.Others,however,saythatthiswouldhavelittleeffectonpublichealthandthatothermeasuresarerequired.Discussboththeseviewsandgiveyourownopinion.话题和题型分类社会生活类,双边讨论型题目分析一些人认为改善公众健康的最佳方式是增建体育设施,另一些人则认为那样效果不大,需
2、要其他方式。讨论双方观点并给出自己的意见。思路提示增加体育设施数量是改善公众健康的最佳方式体育设施的数量增多可以促进人们多使用它们进行锻炼,增强体质,改善健康A的效果不大,需要其他方式增加的体育设施是否可以让所有人使用,如果否,贝公众健康难以改善一些人群不适合使用体育设施,如行动不便的人提倡健康生活饮食习惯,创造良好医疗条件、生活条件等也是很好的改善公众健康的方式SampleAnswerAproblemofmodemsocietiesisthedeclininglevelofhealthinthegeneralpopulation.Onepossiblesolutionistoprovidem
3、oresportsfacilitiestoencourageamoreactivelifestyle.However,therearesomepeoplewhodoubtwhetherthissolutionwouldhaveapositiveeffect.Ithinkthattheoutcomeofsuchapracticemaynotbeasgoodassomepeoplebelieve.(首段开篇摆明观点:增加运动设施并不一定能改善人们的健康水平)Advocatesofthissolutionbelievethatincreasingthenumberofsportsfacilities
4、isthebestwaytoimprovethewell-beingofpeople.Firstofall,nowadayspeoplehavetodevotemoretimeandenergytotheircareersandthereforetheyaretoobusytosparetimeforphysicalexercises.Iftherewereeasy-to-reachlocalsportsfacilities,theywouldbemorelikelytotakepartinphysicalactivitiesregularly.Anotherreasonisthattoday
5、ssedentarylifestylemeansthatphysicalactivityisnolongerpartofpeoplesleisuretime.Withtheofferingofmoresportsfacilities,doingavarietyofsportswouldbemuchmoreattractivethanjustsittinginfrontofascreeneveryevening.(本段是文章第二段,从正面进行论述)However,therearesomereasonswhythissolutionmayhavelittleeffect.Inthefirstpla
6、ce,interestinsportsisnotuniversal,andadditionalfacilitiesmightsimplyattractthosewhoarealreadyfitznotthosewhoneedthembadly.Whatweshoulddoistohelpchildrendevelopapositiveattitudetoexerciseatanearlyage.Inthesecondplace,theremaybebetterwaysoftacklingthisproblem.Forexample,greatertaxpenaltiescouldbeimpos
7、edonhigh-fatfoodproducts,tobaccoandalcohol,asexcessiveconsumptionofanyofthesecontributestopoorhealth.Evenimprovingthepublictransportwouldhelpbecauseittakesalongertimetowalktothebusstopthantothecar.(从反而进行论述:对体育运动的兴趣并不普遍存在,有更好的方法解决此问题)Inmyopinion,increasingthenumberofsportsfacilitiesmaynothavethedesir
8、edresults.Peopleshouldbeencouragedtoformthehabitofdoingregularphysicalexerciseswhentheyareyoung.Inaddition,betterapproachessuchasearliereducationinfitnessawarenessmayassistinimprovingpeopleshealth.(全文总结再次重申观点)满分要素剖析:语言表达本文只用了少数的复杂句,语言简洁明了,清晰表达了作者观点。However,firstofallzinthefirstplace,forexample,inadd
9、ition等连接词使得文章更加连贯流畅。Anotherreasonisthattodayssedentarylifestylemeansthatphysicalactivityisnolongerpartofpeoplesleisuretime.Withtheofferingofmoresportsfacilities,doingavarietyofsportswouldbemuchmoreattractivethanjustsittinginfrontofascreeneveryevening.Anotherreasonisthat可用于议论文中摆出第二个论据。However,therear
10、esomereasonswhythissolutionmayhavelittleeffect.句型HoweverztherearesomereasonsWhy可用于议论文中从观点的正面过渡到反面进行论述。Forexample,greatertaxpenaltiescouldbeimposedonhigh-fatfoodproducts,tobaccoandalcohol,asexcessiveconsumptionofanyofthesecontributestopoorhealth.用ForeXamPle可引出具体事例论证观点。逻辑结构本文是总分总的结构。作者开篇先陈述事实并表达自己的观点,第二段分析支持者观点,第三段分析反对方的看法,使得论证更加客观辩证。最后一段作者总结前文论述,重申观点。