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1、托福作文写作范文详解Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?Television,newspapers,magazines,andothermediapaytoomuchattentiontothepersonallivesoffamouspeoplesuchaspublicfiguresandcelebrities.Usespecificreasonsanddetailstoexplainyouropinion.1 .题目翻译:电视,报纸,杂志戒其他媒体对诸如公众人物戒名人倾注过多的关注,同意与否?2 .审题关键词:Media;Person
2、allivesoffamouspeople;Entertainment3 .论证分析:反:Itcouldbesaidthathavinglittleornoprivacyinonespersonallifecomeswiththeterritoryofbeingafamouspersonality.正:Muchofthemedia,beittelevision,newspaperormagazines,isprimarilymotivatedbysalesandprofits.正:Aprimeexampleofthemediaexploitingthepersonallifeofpublicf
3、igureisthatofthelatePrincessDinana.范文:Ithinkthemediapaystoomuchattentiontotheprivatelivesoffamouspeople.Television,newspapermagazinesandwebsitesdigupallkindsofpastbadactionsandgossip.Theysaythatthesearetruereflectionsofapersonscharacter.Thismaybetrueiftheyoccurredonlyafewyearsbefore,butsomeofthesear
4、ethingspeopledidasteenagers.Peopleintheirfortiesareexpectedtoexplainsomethingtheydidwhentheywerefifteen,whichisanimpossibleposition,becauseeveryonegrowsupandreflectsontheirfoolishandchildishactionsfromyouth.Iftheykilledsomeone,obviouslythatsmorethanayouthfulmistake.Usually,though,theseincidentsinvol
5、veexperimentswithdrugsorbeingrecklessinacar.Theyrenotsomethingthatthepublicneedstoknow.此段结构本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨。后面对主旨速行了简要分析。此段功能本段是文章的首段,引出作者要讨论的话题,对此做简要分析,并点明作者观点。Themedialovestosaythatthepublichasarighttoknow.Thatsnottrue.Wedontneedtoknowifamoviestarorpoliticianhashadanextramaritalaffair.Thati
6、ssomethingofconcernonlytothepeopleinvolved.Wedoneedtoknowifsomeonewereelectingtopublicofficehasbeeninvolvedinshadybusinessdeals,butwedontneedtoknowifhe/shedefaultedonaloantwentyyearsago.此段结构本段是一个总分的结构。前面两句话是本段的主旨。后面对此速行了简单的分析。我们需要知道什么,和我们不需要知道什么,这是个问题。此段功能本段是文章的第二段,也就是正文第一段,写了支持作者立场的第一个分论点。Itseemsth
7、emediadigsupthesefactswithoutgivingthoughtfulconsiderationtowhatmighthappen.Ithasaprofoundeffectonthecelebritysfamily,especiallythechildren.Acelebritysgoodnameandcredibilitymayberuinedbeforeheorshecanprovethatrumorsarefalse.Ifacasegoestocourtzpayingalawyercoulduseupalltheirmoney.Evenifitdoesntcometo
8、thatztheymayfindtheircareerruined.此段结构本段是一个总分的结构。首先第一句话即点明了主旨,即媒体经常有不实报道。后面对主旨通行了简要分析,并重申论点。此段功能本段是文章的第三段,也就是正文第二段,写了支持作者立场的第二个分论点。并通行了重申论点,使用反问的方法引人深思。满分因素剖析:一、语言表达本文的语句通顺,逻辑清晰,语法错误较少。语言使用非常优美。在句式方面,作者大量使用定语从句,宾语从句,并列等长难句结构,文章句子又长又短,内容丰富,富于变化。在词汇方面,作者使用很多高级词汇和固定搭配短语,使得文章内容地道而高深,彰显了作者深厚的写作功底。1. Usua
9、lly,though,theseincidentsinvolveexperimentswithdrugsorbeingrecklessinacar.此句中,though作为插入语出现在句子中,起到补充修饰的作用。在写作中,though和although都有“虽然”的意思,但although另能放在句首,而though可以放在句子的任可地方。形容词reckless的意思是”冒失的,不计后果的(多指行为方面)”,用在此处很贴切形象。2. Itseemsthemediadigsupthesefactswithoutgivingthoughtfulconsiderationtowhatmighthap
10、pen.止匕句中,出现经典句型,itseemsthat,意思是“看上去似乎“,表现一种背景和推测,that后面接从句。动词短语digup的意思是”发掘,挖掘”,同样的表达还有“lookforz不过digup比lookup更加深入仔细,用在这里很贴切。giveconsiderationto的意思的“考虑过“,就相当于动词nconsider,Whatmighthappen是what引导的宾语从句,跟在介词that以后,做宾语。3. Wedoneedtoknowifsomeonewe,reelectingtopublicofficehasbeeninvolvedinshadybusinessdeal
11、szbutwedontneedtoknowifhe/shedefaultedonaloantwentyyearsago.这句话是一个复合句嵌套加并列句的结构,两个分句间用连词and连接。在第一句的谓语动词前,有一个助动词“do”,其强调谓语的作用,使得作者的态度语气更加强烈。在前后两句话中,If都用来引导宾语从句,不再翻译成“如果”,而是翻译成“是否“,做谓语动词know的宾语。在第一个宾语从句中,wereelectingtopublicoffice前面省略that,做if引导的宾语从句中主语someone的定语,起修饰作用。另外,此句中还用到两个高级词汇shady和default形容词shady的意思是阴暗的”,引申义是”名声不好的”。动词default的意思是“拖欠,不履行“,短语defaultonloan的意思是“拖欠贷款”,这两个高级词汇都用的很准确,是举例论证更加生动。二.逻辑结构文章是正正的支持结构,结构比较简单,没有让步。文章中使用了反问的修辞手法,帮助作者强调本文观点,并使得读者深思,值得我们借鉴。